[Catalyst-commits] r8691 - trunk/examples/CatalystAdvent/root/2008/pen

[jester at dev.catalyst.perl.org]

Author: jester
Date: 2008-12-02 14:01:49 +0000 (Tue, 02 Dec 2008)
New Revision: 8691

Modified:
   trunk/examples/CatalystAdvent/root/2008/pen/3.pod
Log:
very light copyedit

Modified: trunk/examples/CatalystAdvent/root/2008/pen/3.pod
===================================================================
--- trunk/examples/CatalystAdvent/root/2008/pen/3.pod	2008-12-02 12:35:22 UTC (rev 8690)
+++ trunk/examples/CatalystAdvent/root/2008/pen/3.pod	2008-12-02 14:01:49 UTC (rev 8691)
@@ -55,10 +55,10 @@
 </pre>
 
 <p>
-This creates a <tt>GP </tt> view.  You'll need to decide on a suitable way to forward
+This creates a <tt>GP</tt> view.  You'll need to decide on a suitable way to forward
 to the appropriate view in your application.  Since this view expects to find
 a Graphics::Primitive object in the <tt>graphics_primitive</tt> key of the
-stash, you might forward to the <tt>GP </tt> view when that key is set.
+stash, you might forward to the <tt>GP</tt> view when that key is set.
 
 <h2>The Problem</h2>
 
@@ -73,8 +73,8 @@
 <p>
 When presenting such a measurement to a reader, such as the amount of bandwidth
 being consumed by your site, it is often desirable to give the number
-some context. If we wanted to conduct more information to the reader, such as
-the last 24 measurements we might resort to a table.
+some context. If we wanted to convey more information to the reader, such as
+the last 24 measurements, we might resort to a table:
 </p>
 <table>
  <thead>
@@ -249,8 +249,8 @@
 
 <p>
 That gets our chart created and the data in it.  You'll want to substitute
-this static static for something dynamic.  Since I've no idea where your data
-is then I will leave it to you.
+this static data for something dynamic.  Since I've no idea where your data
+is, I will leave it to you.
 </p>
 
 =end pod::xhtml
@@ -394,7 +394,7 @@
 =begin pod::xhtml
 
 <p>
-You could go a step further and highlight the "normal" range of values:
+You could go yet another step further and highlight the "normal" range of values:
 </p>
 <blockquote>
 Throughput is <img src="/static/images/2008/sparklines/range-spark.png"> <span style="color: #ff0000">4.4Mb/s</span> (<span style="color: #3399ff">High 5.8, Low 0.7</span>).
@@ -423,4 +423,4 @@
 may give you other ideas.
 </p>
 
-<p style="font-style: italic">-- Cory 'gphat' Watson</p>
\ No newline at end of file
+<p style="font-style: italic">-- Cory 'gphat' Watson</p>