[Catalyst] RFC: Sample press release and announcement homepage

[Joakim Lagerqvist]

2009/4/23 John Napiorkowski <jjn1056 at yahoo.com>:
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> Changes made to the wiki, hopefully it's closer.  Would be great to get some more details in responses, such as more particular words or sentences we don't feel is right.
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Great job John! I think it is very good but here are a couple of
things that came to mind when I read the latest version:

The third sentence under "Announcing Catalyst 5.8!". Perhaps it would
be better to put bug fixes earlier so the "stress" of the sentence
focuses on improved documentation and features:

  The Catalyst 5.8 series comprises countless bug fixes, improved
documentation and many time saving new features.

Then it might also connect better with the following sentence ("These
evolutionary changes...").

The "It is available..." on the second sentence on the following
paragraph could be replaced by "Catalyst is available..." to give
Catalyst a stronger focus.

My next stop is at the third sentence under "About Catalyst", it
starts out good but I get a bit confused after the comma. One idea
could be to explain the "gives" once again:

  We have enabled many new features which gives you more power when
building applications, these new features also gives the Catalyst team
a better base for extending the framework into the future.

The first sentence in following paragraph could be explained a bit
more. Why are all these companies turning to Catalyst?

  More companies are turning to Catalyst as a core web application
technology to benefit from its simplicity, extendability, and power.

Cheers,
Joakim