[Catalyst] RFC: Sample press release and announcement homepage

[John Napiorkowski]

--- On Thu, 4/23/09, Joakim Lagerqvist <joakim.lagerqvist at gmail.com> wrote:

> From: Joakim Lagerqvist <joakim.lagerqvist at gmail.com>
> Subject: Re: [Catalyst] RFC: Sample press release and announcement homepage
> To: "The elegant MVC web framework" <catalyst at lists.scsys.co.uk>
> Date: Thursday, April 23, 2009, 3:53 PM
> 2009/4/23 John Napiorkowski <jjn1056 at yahoo.com>:
> >
> >
> > Changes made to the wiki, hopefully it's closer.
>  Would be great to get some more details in responses, such
> as more particular words or sentences we don't feel is
> right.
> >
> 
> Great job John! I think it is very good but here are a
> couple of
> things that came to mind when I read the latest version:
> 
> The third sentence under "Announcing Catalyst 5.8!".
> Perhaps it would
> be better to put bug fixes earlier so the "stress" of the
> sentence
> focuses on improved documentation and features:
> 
>   The Catalyst 5.8 series comprises countless bug
> fixes, improved
> documentation and many time saving new features.
> 
> Then it might also connect better with the following
> sentence ("These
> evolutionary changes...").
> 
> The "It is available..." on the second sentence on the
> following
> paragraph could be replaced by "Catalyst is available..."
> to give
> Catalyst a stronger focus.
> 
> My next stop is at the third sentence under "About
> Catalyst", it
> starts out good but I get a bit confused after the comma.
> One idea
> could be to explain the "gives" once again:
> 
>   We have enabled many new features which gives you
> more power when
> building applications, these new features also gives the
> Catalyst team
> a better base for extending the framework into the future.
> 
> The first sentence in following paragraph could be
> explained a bit
> more. Why are all these companies turning to Catalyst?
> 
>   More companies are turning to Catalyst as a core web
> application
> technology to benefit from its simplicity, extendability,
> and power.
> 
> Cheers,
> Joakim

Thanks these are great additions.  I modified the wiki page with these and a few other tweaks I got from reviewing several other press releases

Lastest at: http://dev.catalystframework.org/wiki/releaseannouncements/58pressrelease

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